I read it. It was clearly well written by a good writer. It was a bit too... entry-level? for my taste. Not hardcore enough, I mean.
As a gateway to, let's just pick a random example, Stormbringer content, I'm sure it will do fine :)
As something that tides us over until the next Stormbringer update, I'm afraid it didn't quite scratch the itch :) It was too gentle, too realistic.
The same story with the following minor tweaks could, on the other hand, be awesome!
a) make Ted black, with a freak 18 inch horsecock for a dick that he's sensitive about and doesn't like to talk about b) increase Becca's ambivalence and hesitation c) have Ted be assertive, not passive. Steve can remain as-is: secretly enthusiastic about exhibiting his wife; selfishly trying to downplay her misgivings for selfish pleasure. Of course, he's completely oblivious to the saying "Give someone an inch and he'll take a yard" and completely misevaluates his ability to control Ted once events are set into motion.
While on the subject of dream scenarios, I would of course take the opportunity to have Becca and Steve trying for a baby; neither being particularly pleased about the prospect of a black baby :)
Thanks for the mention on your blog. This is Bridgekicker. Yeah, I just started writing a couple months ago, and I'm thinking of more scenarios for both of my series. I'm not done with them by any means.
I read it. It was clearly well written by a good writer. It was a bit too... entry-level? for my taste. Not hardcore enough, I mean.
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As something that tides us over until the next Stormbringer update, I'm afraid it didn't quite scratch the itch :) It was too gentle, too realistic.
The same story with the following minor tweaks could, on the other hand, be awesome!
a) make Ted black, with a freak 18 inch horsecock for a dick that he's sensitive about and doesn't like to talk about
b) increase Becca's ambivalence and hesitation
c) have Ted be assertive, not passive. Steve can remain as-is: secretly enthusiastic about exhibiting his wife; selfishly trying to downplay her misgivings for selfish pleasure. Of course, he's completely oblivious to the saying "Give someone an inch and he'll take a yard" and completely misevaluates his ability to control Ted once events are set into motion.
While on the subject of dream scenarios, I would of course take the opportunity to have Becca and Steve trying for a baby; neither being particularly pleased about the prospect of a black baby :)
Thanks for the mention on your blog. This is Bridgekicker. Yeah, I just started writing a couple months ago, and I'm thinking of more scenarios for both of my series. I'm not done with them by any means.
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